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Response from Pitch…

Here is the video of our pitch…

Emelia and I tried to keep our pitch as close to the 30-60second time period as we could; however, we found it difficult to fit in the specific details in this time period and so over ran. We are happy with how our pitch went in that the audience could picture our opening clearly in their heads and understood what we were trying to put across; this was clear to us as there were no questions at the end. Also, we were happy with the flow as we had practised a couple of times before and so knew when we had to come in to speak. On the other hand, if Emelia and I were to perform our pitch again we would try doing it without the cue cards and by doing so would be more inclined to look up and make eye contact with the audience; this would help with our nerves.

Although Emelia and I had no questions or points of criticism raised after our pitch, when beginning our intricate planning we had a discussion with our teacher and have altered our storyline slightly….

Rather than beginning with a shot of a young girl in her bedroom, Emelia and I have decided to begin with an establishing shot of the icy, isolated field. We have decided to do this as we belief it creates the mysterious tone that we are aiming for and we have also noticed that in various other thriller films they begin with an isolated shot in order to display that the characters are alone. We also believe that it will add aesthetic to our opening. From here, we shall then cut to a shot showing a girl (around the age of 5)  in her bedroom. We shall still then show her looking out of her bedroom window into the icy field. Once again, we shall keep the next shot the same as we show the young girl playing with her toys. However, instead of the young girl calling for her mum, we have decided to have the phone ring and for the young girl to notice her mothers absence through the phone call. She shall call for her mum when the person on the phone asks to speak to her and the from here we shall show her looking round the house calling for her mum. After this, we shall show the young girl pulling on her wellington boots and opening the backdoor. She shall then begin to walk/skip towards the field. We shall then cut to the same dolly shot in order to reveal the dead and icy foot of her mother. From here, we shall show the motionless body of the mother and tilt up to show the young girl looking down on her mother with a shocked, confused and upset expression on her face. We have decided to stick with the tilt and to tilt further upwards to show a mysterious man towering over the young girl. To finish off our opening sequence, we shall tilt further upwards to show the title in the sky.

We have altered our storyline slightly as we believe that this improved version shall flow better and will help our film to create a mysterious tone. We also believe that our new storyline allows our opening to fit within the thriller genre better as it features more aspects that we have seen in thriller films watched such as Dead Silence.

Screenplay Version 3…

Emelia and I are now happy with our screenplay. Although we have still not come up with a title, we can add this in later on in the process. Our third version is not a whole lot different from our second version. However, we have decided that we would like our song at the end to be a distorted and creepy version of ‘Teddy Bears Picnic’. We have chosen this because it shall tie our opening together as it will relate to earlier on where the young girl is heard to be humming the nursery rhyme. It also adds tension and a sense of fear to our opening which is what we are aiming for due to our chosen genre. We once again showed people our final version four screenplay and with the exception of a lack of a title, thew feedback was all positive. We plan to use this screenplay in order to help us film the opening. It shall also give our actors an idea of what we need them to do. Here is the final version of our screenplay…Script-4.jpg

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Screenplay Version 2…

For the second version of our screenplay, Emelia and I took on board the various points of feedback from our friends, family and teacher. We altered our punctuation, including apostrophes, and some of our wording that before did not make sense. Emelia and I have also decided to go along with our teacher’s idea of using ‘Teddy Bear’s Picnic’ as a song for our character to sing rather than ‘Row Row Row Your Boat’ as it is creepier and will fit with the genre and mood of our film better. The largest difference between our first and second version is the length. Our version two is somewhat longer; this is because Emelia and I included the various pieces of plot that we had previously forgotten. With the added plot, we had to once again get feedback from our friends, family and teachers. For this version, our feedback was much more positive. People said that they could imagine our film opening clearly. They also agreed with the route that we had chosen for our characters. Emelia and I were happy with our version two but still did not have a title for our film. We planned to compose our own score but time pressures have led us to reconsider this idea…



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Screenplay Version 1…

In order to write our screenplay, Emelia and I decided to use the website ‘WriterDuet’. This website allows two people to work on the same screenplay at the same time but on two different devices. It also allows you to have a FaceTime call whilst doing so which is pretty cool. This website also helps with giving your screenplay the exact features that a real screenplay would include, for example the font… 12 point, 10 pitch Courier Typeface. WriterDuet was really helpful and allowed writing our screenplay to be as simple as possible.

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It did not take too long for Emelia and I to figure out how to work WriterDuet. However, it did take us quite a while to figure out how to connect the script to two devices! Using our research into codes and conventions of screenplays, Emelia and I applied our knowledge and began trying to replicate a screenplay for our film opening! Unfortunately, Emelia and I have not yet chosen a title and so we had to leave that part blank to fill in once we have decided. Here is our first draft of a screenplay for our thriller film opening…




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As soon as Emelia and I finished our first draft of screenplay, we printed off several copies and gave them out to family, friends and our teacher. From our feedback, people told us that our first draft looked very similar to a real screenplay but was too short for a two minute film opening. It was then when Emelia and I noticed that we had missed out a large section of our plot when writing the script! We had forgotten to write about the part where the young girl is looking for her mother around the house. We had also forgotten to write about the part where she puts on her wellingtons, opens the door and walks into the field! We found the feedback from our media teacher very helpful. He helped us with our grammar, reminded us of the areas that we missed out and helped us improve it further. He also provoked us to start thinking more about the intricate details in our screenplay…

Research into Conventions of a Script

So that Emelia and I could create a realistic and professional looking script, we looked into the codes and conventions of a script/screenplay. Here is what Emelia found…

In order to have the best possible script we decided to research the codes and conventions of a professional script. We found the website writersstore.com extremely helpful in learning the format of a script because it clearly shows how everything should be later out and what everything means.
However, when we first tried to write a script we didn’t particularly research because we thought that it wouldn’t be as important as some other things that we had to do. This led to a terrible first version of the script that included nothing but dialogue. When we asked people about this the overall feedback was that it was confusing and they didn’t understand what was going in with the story.
After that feedback we decided to try again and make it a bit more complicated. We researched film scripts and looked at a few real life scripts from movies that we had seen and so we decided to try and mimic these as much as possible. These were better and people understood them more but it still didn’t look like we had made a film script. So we decided that version 2 wasn’t as good as it could be so we decided to do further research about exactly how film scripts are made.
We spent a long time looking at different diagrams that showed what scripts should look like but we couldn’t really replicate it. Then we discovered a website called WriterDuet in which we can both be on different computers and collaborate with each other on the script. Not only did this make it easier but WriterDuet also has features that make it much easier to write a professional screenplay and so we decided to use this. Along with the information from writersstore.com we think we successfully researched all the codes and conventions of a script and we are happy with the way our screenplay turned out.

“Codes and Conventions Of A Screenplay:
Dialogue, what the characters say is the main aspect of the script, must be exact

Stage directions, must be short and concise and will tell the actors exactly what their character is doing

Order, the script must start with a title, then an explanation of the scene, then a brief summary of the characters

Enter/Exit, all entrances and exits must be clearly shown

INT/EXT, stand for interior and exterior, they show where the scene is taking place, inside or outside

They are just a few of the main things we learned in our research about the conventions of a script.”

Basic Script

Emelia and I decided to plot a very basic script in my sketchbook. We did this so that when we begin writing our real script, we have an idea on the order of shots. It also helped us to picture how our opening will end up looking and allowed us to realise that we will have to visualise the timings of each shot before filming. Here is our first draft of a script…

We know that our real screenplay will have to be a lot more detailed but felt as though a basic script was a good place to start. Next we shall research into the conventions of a real script so that we can get ours as close to the real thing as possible!

Foundation Portfolio in Media

We have recently been introduced to our task for our coursework. This coursework will count for 50% of our overall AS mark. Our task is to “create the titles and opening of a new fiction film to last a maximum of two minutes”. For this aspect to the course, we will be working in twos. I am working with Emelia Rodgers as we get along, work well together and enjoyed working together at GCSE. In order to earn the highest mark that we can, there is going to be a lot of work put into this task. The planning work put into the task fits into the ‘Pre-Production’ category of the project. In todays lesson we went through the various aspects that we will need to include in our pre production planning. There is a lot to think about including…

Form: Firstly we will need to research the form of film openings in order to understand what the task is exactly asking of us. To complete this, we will research the common conventions in existing film openings. Then, we shall watch a few openings and plot the timeline in order to get a sense of what is expected and how to structure it. For example, how much actual film footage to include, how to relate the beginning to the plot of the entire film and of course the various aspects such as idents needed in every film opening.

Genre: Next, we need to search our options. We will look into the many genres out there and choose our favourite. In order to choose successfully, we need to understand the genre features to each. We will also need to know what an audience expects when watching a certain genre in order to base our film around that in attempt to make it as interesting and realistic as possible.

Idea: Once we have our chosen genre, we will need to think of an idea for our film. In order to plan the opening, we will need to plot an entire film. We will also need to come up with a title for our film in this section of the pre production.

Pitch: When we have chosen our genre and come up with an idea/plot we will need to begin the process of creating a pitch. In order to create a professional script, we will need to research the conventions to a pitch. We shall then write the script to a time limit of 30 seconds. We shall then rehearse our pitch so that it will seem thought out, convincing and professional when sharing it with our class, teachers and camera. From this, we will receive feedback, criticism and advice from others in an attempt to perfect our final idea so that we can then move onto the next step…

Script: The next step in the process is to produce a script for our 2 minute opening. We can not, however, just note down what we would like our characters to say. In order to complete this aspect to the highest standard, we will need to once again research the codes and conventions of a genuine, professional script. Once we have produced our script, we will have a read through and receive progressive feedback in order to get it as perfect as we can.

Storyboards: After writing our scripts, we will move onto creating storyboards. First, we will need to (once again) research the codes and conventions to a professional set of storyboards. We shall then hand draw our own set in as much detail as possible. After this, we will find an alternative way of creating storyboards in order to create an animated version. We shall then show these copies to others in order to receive some constructive feedback.

Branding: In order to complete the task successfully, we will need to create everything shown in the film. This includes the logos and idents of companies shown at the beginning. We will use a software called “Motion” for the first time and attempt to create a set of logos and idents to use in our opening in order to make it seem as realistic as possible.

Practical Preparations: The final stage to our pre production preparations are to make sure we have everything ready for filming. We will have to contact and organise some actors and various locations to film in. We will also need to practise the makeup and hair for the film as well as organising costumes and a filming schedule. On top of this, we will have to make sure that we know how to work the equipment properly and organise using it for filming.

Once we have completed all of the pre production work, we will be ready to film. We have been given the Christmas holidays to film footage for our film so that we can begin editing when we return.