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Evaluation Task Number 6…

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Screenplay Version 3…

Emelia and I are now happy with our screenplay. Although we have still not come up with a title, we can add this in later on in the process. Our third version is not a whole lot different from our second version. However, we have decided that we would like our song at the end to be a distorted and creepy version of ‘Teddy Bears Picnic’. We have chosen this because it shall tie our opening together as it will relate to earlier on where the young girl is heard to be humming the nursery rhyme. It also adds tension and a sense of fear to our opening which is what we are aiming for due to our chosen genre. We once again showed people our final version four screenplay and with the exception of a lack of a title, thew feedback was all positive. We plan to use this screenplay in order to help us film the opening. It shall also give our actors an idea of what we need them to do. Here is the final version of our screenplay…Script-4.jpg

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Screenplay Version 2…

For the second version of our screenplay, Emelia and I took on board the various points of feedback from our friends, family and teacher. We altered our punctuation, including apostrophes, and some of our wording that before did not make sense. Emelia and I have also decided to go along with our teacher’s idea of using ‘Teddy Bear’s Picnic’ as a song for our character to sing rather than ‘Row Row Row Your Boat’ as it is creepier and will fit with the genre and mood of our film better. The largest difference between our first and second version is the length. Our version two is somewhat longer; this is because Emelia and I included the various pieces of plot that we had previously forgotten. With the added plot, we had to once again get feedback from our friends, family and teachers. For this version, our feedback was much more positive. People said that they could imagine our film opening clearly. They also agreed with the route that we had chosen for our characters. Emelia and I were happy with our version two but still did not have a title for our film. We planned to compose our own score but time pressures have led us to reconsider this idea…

 

 

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Screenplay Version 1…

In order to write our screenplay, Emelia and I decided to use the website ‘WriterDuet’. This website allows two people to work on the same screenplay at the same time but on two different devices. It also allows you to have a FaceTime call whilst doing so which is pretty cool. This website also helps with giving your screenplay the exact features that a real screenplay would include, for example the font… 12 point, 10 pitch Courier Typeface. WriterDuet was really helpful and allowed writing our screenplay to be as simple as possible.

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It did not take too long for Emelia and I to figure out how to work WriterDuet. However, it did take us quite a while to figure out how to connect the script to two devices! Using our research into codes and conventions of screenplays, Emelia and I applied our knowledge and began trying to replicate a screenplay for our film opening! Unfortunately, Emelia and I have not yet chosen a title and so we had to leave that part blank to fill in once we have decided. Here is our first draft of a screenplay for our thriller film opening…

 

 

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As soon as Emelia and I finished our first draft of screenplay, we printed off several copies and gave them out to family, friends and our teacher. From our feedback, people told us that our first draft looked very similar to a real screenplay but was too short for a two minute film opening. It was then when Emelia and I noticed that we had missed out a large section of our plot when writing the script! We had forgotten to write about the part where the young girl is looking for her mother around the house. We had also forgotten to write about the part where she puts on her wellingtons, opens the door and walks into the field! We found the feedback from our media teacher very helpful. He helped us with our grammar, reminded us of the areas that we missed out and helped us improve it further. He also provoked us to start thinking more about the intricate details in our screenplay…